The few yellowing or brown leaves look out of place -- if I thought this were a "portrait" at a wedding it wouldnt bother me; since it is a "fashion" photo I'd suggest that they be snipped off before final film is shot.(posted 8443 days ago)I'd agree with the comments of the other poster above about expression, percieved attitude of the model. The figure/background relationship is too evenly matched; thus a very interesting environment starts to look a little stagey and flat even though it clearly ISN"T a set. I say either less environment or much much more.
All that said, the light is excellent -- very subtle and clean.
Overall I like the idea for the shoot -- I just wonder if there isn't a slightly more effective one somewhere else on the roll.